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Post by Starbeast on Aug 5, 2009 2:00:44 GMT 12
Good Galaxy, it's nice to here from you Lady Bunny,
Once again thank you for a another pleasent reveiw, and I do understand that you are a busy person too.
Will love find a way?
Will Nala and Silverfang be together?
Will Princess Snow continue to remain cool about people who ask for her hand?
Will Jack give the protrait of himself to Tabby?
Will Princess Snow say another exciting thing like: Great Galaxy?
Will Silverfang wear a different cologne?
I can say no more.
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Post by Honey_Bunny on Aug 12, 2009 15:55:36 GMT 12
Hello there matie! Dont get much time to be online, bloody uni gets in the way. However, I read your story where I left off, so here is what I think....
In the previous chapter you have a picture of the "fool"... is that meant to be directed at Billy?
HER FEAR WAS HER DRIVING FORCE Good sentence.
The whole scene where Tabby wears black is a perfect time for Skarr to sing "Oh dear what can I do, baby's in black and I'm feeling blue"
Pretty-kitty will wear that black dress at your funeral as well Jackie Dragon what a comforting thought!
I want you to show me no mercy, hit me as hard as you can and stop when you reach thirty. Please Tabby, I want you to feel better about me." A massochist! Blimey, Starbeast, what have you been watching/reading! Bloody hell! And I thought Tabby would have more sense than to beat Jack. She could have forgiven him.
She grinned wickedly behind his back. Tabby made it sound like she didn't want to: "I will do this for you because I love you And she is taking pleasure in doing this! Is she a saddist? Sure, he was mean to her and he hit her but he is her commander! She was told to bring Nala alive and she failed, hence the punishment. On the other hand, she has to obey Jack, but I stil think she should have not beat him. Or alteast beat him once, break down with a sad tear chocked whisper of "I cant do this"
But then again, I suppose this shows Jack that Tabby will not be affected by her emotions. However, this beating, and the fact that Tabby didnt object to beating him tells Jack that there is falsity in her love to him...?
The beating scene... what made you write it? Were you in a bad mood, or were you just getting into Jack...? I am not saying it was a bad scene, I am just wondering.
Chapter 22
Jack was dressed in a black suit and cape: "I never kissed you on the lips, may I?" Tabby stood in front of him and nodded gently with a smile. Awwwww! What a romantic!
Mr Kite: "Yeah like Indiana Jones...ah...I mean..." Hahaha!
Silverfang lead Ringo into the corriders of the ship: "Mr Starr, I want to apologize to you. Paul told me you had your heart interested in Nala before I had an interest in her. I felt like I stole her from you and I want you to have your chance with Nala. So..." The wolf pointed at Nala off in the distance. Oh Silvie, be a captain!. You dont treat women like this, she aint an object for everyone to try out. You wouldnt say to Jack, hey Jack., we got the box but I know how much you want it too, so we decided to give you a chance and do stuff with it. [this was not meant to sound harsh, by the way]
Ringo looked into the glassy eyes of the wolf: "My good friend Silverfang...don't let ME stand in the way of YOUR heart...your eyes tell me you already fell in love with her. I wouldn't feel right being with her." He held out his hand. "Congratulations Captain, I know you'll treat her well." Ever heard of l'amour de trois? Kidding!
Nice cliff hanger there! I love it when Jack is "goodbad" (a neologism!!!!!)
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Post by Starbeast on Aug 13, 2009 13:40:05 GMT 12
BUNNY: "Hello there matie! Dont get much time to be online, bloody uni gets in the way."
STARBEAST: "Howdy Hey there Honey Bunny! No hurries no worries."
BUNNY: "In the previous chapter you have a picture of the fool... is that meant to be directed at Billy?"
STARBEAST: "Yep."
BUNNY: "HER FEAR WAS HER DRIVING FORCE. Good sentence."
STARBEAST: "I liked it too, it just popped into my mind."
BUNNY: "The whole scene where Tabby wears black is a perfect time for Skarr to sing: Oh dear what can I do, baby's in black and I'm feeling blue."
STARBEAST: "I read your extended poem, it was very nice."
BUNNY: Pretty-kitty will wear that black dress at your funeral as well Jackie Dragon. "What a comforting thought!"
STARBEAST: "Tabby begins to play a very dangerous game."
BUNNY: I want you to show me no mercy, hit me as hard as you can and stop when you reach thirty. Please Tabby, I want you to feel better about me. "A massochist! Blimey, Starbeast, what have you been watching/reading! Bloody hell! And I thought Tabby would have more sense than to beat Jack. She could have forgiven him."
STARBEAST: "Keep reading further for the answer."
BUNNY: She grinned wickedly behind his back. Tabby made it sound like she didn't want to: "I will do this for you because I love you." And she is taking pleasure in doing this! Is she a saddist? Sure, he was mean to her and he hit her but he is her commander! She was told to bring Nala alive and she failed, hence the punishment. On the other hand, she has to obey Jack, but I still think she should have not beat him. Or at least beat him once, break down with a sad tear choked whisper of I cant do this."
STARBEAST: "Tabby gave her reason. (I'll save you the research) She knew Skarr would always love her. And she decided Jack was too reckless, thus he would have a short lifespan. Therefore she could run back to Skarr when Jack meets an untimely demise. Like I said, Tabby is playing a dangerous game."
BUNNY: "But then again, I suppose this shows Jack that Tabby will not be affected by her emotions. However, this beating, and the fact that Tabby didn't object to beating him tells Jack that there is falsity in her love to him...?"
STARBEAST: "Sherlock Bunny you're on the right track."
BUNNY: "The beating scene... what made you write it? Were you in a bad mood, or were you just getting into Jack...? I am not saying it was a bad scene, I am just wondering."
STARBEAST: "I got the idea from some tv movie long ago. It wasn't as graphic, only 3 strikes. Yes, I was in JACK MODE.
Chapter 22
BUNNY: Jack was dressed in a black suit and cape: "I never kissed you on the lips, may I?" Tabby stood in front of him and nodded gently with a smile. "Awwwww! What a romantic!"
STARBEAST: "Jack runs like hot and cold water out of the same faucet."
BUNNY: Mr Kite: "Yeah like Indiana Jones...ah...I mean..." "Hahaha!"
STARBEAST: "I chuckled too. Especially because he corrected Albert before he stepped on his own tongue"
BUNNY: Silverfang lead Ringo into the corriders of the ship: "Mr Starr, I want to apologize to you. Paul told me you had your heart interested in Nala before I had an interest in her. I felt like I stole her from you and I want you to have your chance with Nala. So..." The wolf pointed at Nala off in the distance. "Oh Silvie, be a captain!. You dont treat women like this, she aint an object for everyone to try out. You wouldnt say to Jack, hey Jack., we got the box but I know how much you want it too, so we decided to give you a chance and do stuff with it. [this was not meant to sound harsh, by the way]"
STARBEAST: "I was trying to convey everyone's awkwardness in romance, since they are all new to the game. I was inspired by other people's experiances. Things can get complicated when love is in the air, especially when it's between a close group of people."
BUNNY: Ringo looked into the glassy eyes of the wolf: "My good friend Silverfang...don't let ME stand in the way of YOUR heart...your eyes tell me you already fell in love with her. I wouldn't feel right being with her." He held out his hand. "Congratulations Captain, I know you'll treat her well." "Ever heard of l'amour de trois? Kidding!"
STARBEAST: "I like it when someone is a good loser, I wanted Ringo to love and loose, just like people in real life. The LOVE of THREE, my my little rabbit, what have YOU been reading. (Just kidding, pardon me while I try to get that freaky image out of my wittle bwain. {little brain})"
BUNNY: "Nice cliff hanger there! I love it when Jack is goodbad; (a neologism!!!!!)"
STARBEAST: "I enjoy at times a "GOODBAD" villain in fiction, I wanted Jack to have that quality, rather than a blunt and predictable killer. I like that word, neologism."WELL, I'LL LET OCTIE AND YOU EXERCISE YOUR MAGNIFICANT BRAINS WHILE I GO WORK ON MY GROSS, CREEPY, WEIRD, VIOLENT & DISTURBING SAGA....heh heh. I MADE A FUNNY. ER UMM, I HOPE YOU'RE CHUCKLING TOO.......argh, it's tough to be a writer.
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Post by Honey_Bunny on Aug 13, 2009 13:58:45 GMT 12
STARBEAST: "Tabby gave her reason. (I'll save you the research) She knew Skarr would always love her. And she decided Jack was too reckless, thus he would have a short lifespan. Then she could run back to Skarr when Jack meets an untimely demise. Like I said, Tabby is playing a dangerous game."
And what made her decide that Jack does not love her? He is just a different kind of a man. No one said that Skarr will not get physical with the cat should she decide to play dirty with him. (dirty-not in that sense!)
If she thinks that Jack is too reckless, then she can try to change him and make his life span longer.
Whatever Jack's intentions are, it seems to me that he does have a soft spot for Tabby and if she is going to ruin that... then there wont be much help for her. Jack will have every reason to not like her and wish her harm.
I just had a thought! If Jack will find out what game Tabby plays and that she doesnt love him, the best way for Jack to hurt her is to kill Skarr.... Sorry, thats kind of vicious of me!
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Post by Starbeast on Aug 13, 2009 14:48:33 GMT 12
I want to tell you everything about what is going to happen, but then there wouldn't be anything interesting to think about.
I do like how intrigued you get with the saga, miss Holmes.
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Post by Octie on Aug 16, 2009 2:31:33 GMT 12
Hello, I'm back ;D Haven't been here for two weeks... tut-tut... OK, first things first: my two favourite bits! Number One: She hugged the tall horse again. "I love you Michelle, I want you to know that I think you're a beautiful person on the inside. To me, you're like the big sister I always wanted." Tabby looked soulfully into the horse's eyes. "I really mean that."
Michelle grew a smile: "Aww what a nice thing to say." She hugged the little cat back. That just put a huge smile on my face ^_____^ So incredibly sweet. Sign me up for the Tabby-and-Michelle-Friendship-Fan-Club! Haha, I actually scribbled a little sketchy picture of Tabby and Michelle about two weeks ago... it's not very good and quite untidy, but it looks like this: ;D (I also drew one of Ringo bringing flowers to Princess Snow ) Number Two (you can probably guess ): Ringo looked into the glassy eyes of the wolf: "My good friend Silverfang...don't let ME stand in the way of YOUR heart...your eyes tell me you already fell in love with her. I wouldn't feel right being with her." He held out his hand. "Congratulations Captain, I know you'll treat her well."
Silverfang was stunned, then hugged Ringo: "Thank you...thank you...my good friend." He wiped tears off his own face.
Ringo patted the the wolf on the shoulder: "Go get her mate!" The human walked away and back to his other friends.Aww... sweet, friendly Ringo ^_^ And yay for Silverfang Such a cute scene I wonder what Snowie told the Beatles about Ringo.... Wow, throughout this whole part Jack is in a really good mood He's actually being nice, even touching (when he reads the poem to Tabby, gives her presents and acts gentle and kind with her...) He really is quite unpredictable! Just before, he continuously threw her on her bed and then almost squished her, and now he's all nice... It looks like he really loves her though (unless it's also something that changes when his mood changes...) Still on the Jack subject, I quite liked this bit of dialogue: Jack looked happy: "I'm full of surprizes. For example, I have the BOX and Albert already in my custody. Very soon I'll have everyone from your ship teleported here and put into holding cells. Now now, no need to make a sad face, I want you and all of your friends see what glorious new beginnings I have in store for this universe. You see, I want an intelligent audience to observe and properly appreciate what I am doing with the universe and all of the other dimensions and parallel universes. My soldiers are a bit dim-witted and some can't even read, but yet I do have a few that surpass the rest, like Tabby. I really love her you know, she is exactely what I've been looking for in a mate.
Nothing to say, I don't blame you, you're trying to come to grips with losing to me, and I'm sure your brain is formulating a plan to stop me." He's all chatty and matter-of-fact-like, hehe! "For example, I have the BOX..." But the part with the beating.... if it was a movie, I'd definitely look away I was never good at that sort of thing... ouch... On a happier note, I like Michelle's drawing skills! And Ringo likes drawing as well... Yay, that's two of my favourite characters:) Did Michelle draw the Tabby portrait too? Great stuff, great stuff
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Post by Starbeast on Aug 16, 2009 3:56:37 GMT 12
Octie: "Hello, I'm back ;D Haven't been here for two weeks... tut-tut..."
Starbeast: "We all get occupied with things we can't avoid, no hurries, no worries. It's nice to have you back."
Octie: "OK, first things first: my two favourite bits!"
Number One:She hugged the tall horse again. "I love you Michelle, I want you to know that I think you're a beautiful person on the inside. To me, you're like the big sister I always wanted." Tabby looked soulfully into the horse's eyes. "I really mean that."
Michelle grew a smile: "Aww what a nice thing to say." She hugged the little cat back. Octie: "That just put a huge smile on my face ^_____^ So incredibly sweet. Sign me up for the Tabby-and-Michelle-Friendship-Fan-Club! Haha, I actually scribbled a little sketchy picture of Tabby and Michelle about two weeks ago... it's not very good and quite untidy, but it looks like this:"
;D
(I also drew one of Ringo bringing flowers to Princess Snow )
Starbeast: "I think even Tabby & Michelle would love your picture, I really do. Coincidentally, I also thought of posting some sketches of Tabby.....hmm, maybe even Michelle too. And the friendship scene between Tabby & Michelle I thought was very sweet too. Tabby the little white cat can be tough and vicious at times (we know the reason for that), but her heart's center is soft and loving, she really does care about others."
Number Two (you can probably guess ):Ringo looked into the glassy eyes of the wolf: "My good friend Silverfang...don't let ME stand in the way of YOUR heart...your eyes tell me you already fell in love with her. I wouldn't feel right being with her." He held out his hand. "Congratulations Captain, I know you'll treat her well."
Silverfang was stunned, then hugged Ringo: "Thank you...thank you...my good friend." He wiped tears off his own face.
Ringo patted the the wolf on the shoulder: "Go get her mate!" The human walked away and back to his other friends.Octie: "Aww... sweet, friendly Ringo ^_^ And yay for Silverfang Such a cute scene I wonder what Snowie told the Beatles about Ringo...."
Starbeast: "I wanted to show the awkwardness of everyone trying to date, because it's the first time for alot of the characters."
Octie: "Wow, throughout this whole part Jack is in a really good mood He's actually being nice, even touching (when he reads the poem to Tabby, gives her presents and acts gentle and kind with her...) He really is quite unpredictable! Just before, he continuously threw her on her bed and then almost squished her, and now he's all nice... It looks like he really loves her though (unless it's also something that changes when his mood changes...)"
Starbeast: "Jack is an extremist, he can be really heartless or really quite pleasent. When Jack was throwing Tabby on her bed, he was just playing rough with her. But when he pounced on her and grabbed her by the back of her head, he wanted to question her to make sure she was his alone. He's very possessive toward her, but he did give her the opportunity to be with him or not."
Octie: Still on the Jack subject, I quite liked this bit of dialogue:Jack looked happy: "I'm full of surprizes. For example, I have the BOX and Albert already in my custody. Very soon I'll have everyone from your ship teleported here and put into holding cells. Now now, no need to make a sad face, I want you and all of your friends see what glorious new beginnings I have in store for this universe. You see, I want an intelligent audience to observe and properly appreciate what I am doing with the universe and all of the other dimensions and parallel universes. My soldiers are a bit dim-witted and some can't even read, but yet I do have a few that surpass the rest, like Tabby. I really love her you know, she is exactely what I've been looking for in a mate.
Nothing to say, I don't blame you, you're trying to come to grips with losing to me, and I'm sure your brain is formulating a plan to stop me.Octie: "He's all chatty and matter-of-fact-like, hehe! For example, I have the BOX... "
Starbeast: "I like the confident Jack, he loves being in control of everything.....and everyone. Spooky guy."
Octie: "But the part with the beating.... if it was a movie, I'd definitely look away I was never good at that sort of thing... ouch..."
Starbeast: "(the tv movie was only 3 strikes) It was a tough decision to incorporate that scene with Tabby punishing Jack. But insane people do strange things, and I wanted Jack to be that kind of person who thinks he is normal. He wanted to show Tabby that he can be fair and just when he made an error about her, he felt bad (like Skarr did)."
Octie: "On a happier note, I like Michelle's drawing skills! And Ringo likes drawing as well... Yay, that's two of my favourite characters:) Did Michelle draw the Tabby portrait too? Great stuff, great stuff."
Starbeast: "I thought it would be cool to show some of the characters talents and interests. Yes, Michelle did Tabby's profile picture too, she liked making a picture of her new best friend but was afraid of disappointing Jack."
THANKS AGAIN FOR YOUR REVEIW, I LOVE READING THEM, I ALSO ENJOY HOW BLUNT & HONEST BUNNY IS WITH HER "LIKES & DISLIKES." I LIKE BEING CRITIQUED, THAT WAY I KNOW WHAT I NEED TO WORK ON, OR WHAT MISTAKES I MADE.
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Post by Honey_Bunny on Aug 17, 2009 17:32:52 GMT 12
But I never critisized your work, Starbeast! I always thought "blunt" has a negative connotation to it, but I am guessing I can take what you said as a compliment. I am a nice honest bunny not a blunt one On another note, we would love to see your sketches of Michelle and Tabby [or anything else that you sketched, for that matter]. Me, when it comes to drawing, I stick to stick figuers!
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Post by Starbeast on Aug 18, 2009 7:23:06 GMT 12
Buuny: "But I never critisized your work, Starbeast! I always thought blunt has a negative connotation to it, but I am guessing I can take what you said as a compliment. I am a nice honest bunny not a blunt one."
Starbeast: "Yes it was a compliment, you are a nice one, I'm just saying you get right to the point quickly, nothing negatively. You remind me of a very good friend of mine, she doesn't mince words either, she just says it like it is, in a polite and nice way."
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Post by Octie on Aug 20, 2009 21:28:18 GMT 12
Hehe, Silverfang's trick with the ring works every time, even on Jack! Go Silvie!! And you should definitely post your sketches of Tabby, Starbeast - we'd certainly love to see 'em
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Post by Starbeast on Sept 3, 2009 2:11:15 GMT 12
Hi Octie,
I'm not at full access yet, so my time here is limited.
Hi Bunny!
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Post by Starbeast on Sept 4, 2009 11:15:10 GMT 12
K-9: "Master, computer is operating at 100% capacity."
Dr Starbeast: "Excellent, thank you K-9."
K-9: "Master, you've reached your 500th post. You are now at the KHAFRA level."
Dr Starbeast: "Really? Let's go back in Earth's time to 1963 and visit the up-and-coming musicians known as The BEATLES".
K-9: "That wouldn't be possible...the BEATLES are in the Andromeda Galaxy, and 2000 years into the future. Master."
Dr Starbeast: "Well set a course and let's go there."
K-9: "I am unable to do that, master."
Dr Starbeast: "Why?"
K-9: "I need to go for a walk first."
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Post by Honey_Bunny on Sept 5, 2009 22:11:56 GMT 12
OH my Beastie, congrats on being Khafra!!!!!!
Khafra is a very interesting character in the Albert stories, not fully developed I think, but stil very interesting. From little Eric to Khafra... wow!
Indeed computer time is against me , but I am here now.
So I see you are up and running then? Good! I'll be online more often now (I hope)
So much reading to catch up on....!
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Post by Starbeast on Sept 6, 2009 7:23:39 GMT 12
Honey Bunny: "OH my Beastie, congrats on being Khafra!!!!!!"
Starbeast: "Thanks, I was wondering what the new title was going to be when I reached 500."
Honey Bunny: "Khafra is a very interesting character in the Albert stories, not fully developed I think, but stil very interesting. From little Eric to Khafra... wow!"
Starbeast: "Hmm, I'm the first to do so."
Honey Bunny: "Indeed computer time is against me , but I am here now."
Starbeast: "No hurries or worries, you have to share it with Octie, so I understand."
Honey Bunny: "So I see you are up and running then? Good! I'll be online more often now (I hope). So much reading to catch up on....!"
Starbeast: "Me too."
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Post by Octie on Sept 10, 2009 22:17:17 GMT 12
..... I'm 75 posts late ( ) but congrats on your 500th post! ;D Loved that Dr Who/K-9 dialogue Looks like we're going to have a new Doctor soon... I quite liked David Tennant in that role... Hmm, is it just me or... or.. did the BOX story disappear somehow? I can't find it
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